Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, celebrities have always played an influential role in people's life. In this vein of thought, some believe that celebrities' opinion is more important to young people than older people, while others disagree with this idea. I strongly believe that celebrities have a profound impact on youth rather than the older ones. I will explore my reasons in the following essay.
To begin with, since youngsters are starting their journey of life, they are pursuing a role model in order to imitate them and to make their dreams come true. However, mature people have already experienced this phase and found their way. young people, on the other hand, seek avidly for a role model to identify with them. So, every single detail about celebrities' life is appealing to them. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this when I was a teenager, I was so impressed by a singer, and I have been trying to imitate her style, her accent, and even her opinion about different topics, because in this way I could distinguish myself from others and I have been trying to be different and acceptable, yet after I grew older I realized the importance of thinking logically and finding my real interest which suits my personality.
Furthermore, it is no secret to anyone that, the more people get mature, the more conservative they become, and they will not accept new ideas or opinions without considering different aspects of them. Young people are more influenced by others’ opinions and they are prone to make an impulsive decisions, due to the lack of experience. They just desire to keep up with new trends and not care about their consequences. While mature people try to make their decision rationally, as they have encountered the result of their hasty decision in real life.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that youngsters are more influenced by celebrities than mature people, because they try to imitate a role model to identify with and follow their dreams, and what is more, they are prone to be influenced by their opinion due to the lack of experience in real life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 132, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...this vein of thought, some believe that celebrities opinion is more important to young peop...
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Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Young
...rienced this phase and found their way. young people, on the other hand, seek avidly ...
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Line 5, column 296, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'decision'?
Suggestion: decision
...and they are prone to make an impulsive decisions, due to the lack of experience. They ju...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, while, in conclusion, to begin with, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1754.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94084507042 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68724126604 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498591549296 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 106.198336779 48.9658058833 217% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 125.285714286 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3571428571 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225071121625 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895820341459 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589044516956 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164718949515 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686620724188 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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