Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The way advertisement is crucial in international trade. Nowadays, there are many companies competing each other to sell their products by using of different types of marketing and advertising strategies throughout world. some people believe that corporation exaggerate to advertise their products than its reality, however others hold oppisite view. In my opinion, level of advertising in products beyond their fact for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that firms, making advertisement overseas, increase sale of products. Among various products like goods, comunidity, apparents, and so on, how to make advertising can impact on company's future. In addition, individuals pay more attation to kind of advertising instead of level of products. Therefore, in any way, shape, or form advertisements, firms compete to obtain more customers in order to sell more their products no matter the real quality. For exmaple, polls, surveying relation between kind of advertising and sales, show that people purchase products according to level and number of ads. At first, researchers anticipated customers, who buy something, would choose products pursuant to their reality. Surprisingly, as over time, companies making good advertisement, using celebrities and famous people like actresses, actors, football players, in spite of low level of products could sell, while other firms producing high quality products bankrupted. As you can see, advertisment cause product to appear much better than its fact.
Another reason is that advertising, especially exceeding reality, distinguish a product. In today's business world, the best way abosrbing people is that make advertisement exaggeratedly, although some individuals might don't be tempted. companies exploit of communication equipment including televistion, radio, Internet, and so forth so as to take advantage of audiences. In other words, advertisement maker who want to just gain more profit broadcast special product countless in order to maintain in buyer’s minds in spite of factual standard. For instance, I had grocery store, containing assorted products in different quality, in Teharn city. powders, belonging a low level company, would never sell and occupy space of my supermarket. After some time has passed, company began to make advertisement in order to intrigue customers to buy its products. Amazingly, day by day, people make a purchase powder, not shopping ever before advertising, and I could gain more money. This experience taught me, quality products have less influence on appearence than advirtisments.
In conclusion, make advertising cause products to appear better than its facts that lead to increase sale of products, and distinguish a product. companies should pay more to advertisement if they want to progress faster.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion, in other words, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2407.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71733966746 4.8611393121 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09486512596 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589073634204 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1800417825 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.652173913 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3043478261 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17391304348 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197068447701 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647489815187 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484362277281 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144435420034 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032782446629 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 10.9000537634 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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