Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
celebrities are a crucial part of our society. As over time, by advent new technology such as social networking, famous entertainers and atheltes face serious problem. Some people believe that well known athletes and entertainers entitle to have more privacy, while others hold the opposit view. In my opinion, all individuals should respect to privacy of celebrities always for two noticeable reasons.
First, renown athlete need to live like other people and have private time. Now every athlete has fan page in social networking such as Telegram and Instegram and have a lot of followers. if these athletes make mistake in any contest, their fans create bad condition on Internet. However, other people even make drastic mistake anybody do not intrude them. For exmaple, I live in Iran where people really do not respect to each other significately when person make mistake especially athletes. A few years ago in Football World Cup, when one player pushed competint player and was fired inadvertently, all people went to his page on Instagram and gave him cours. even he could not go out his home because of his mistake. As you can see, athletes have right to be respected their privacy.
Second, famous entertainers have hard time in their performance and their privacy should be respected by other people. In other words, they spend all their time in their work and really become exhausted. when they want to finish their task, they need to live easily without any intrude. For instance, I read an article about comedy's life who are very famous in their countries. The sychological reachers showed that actors and acernos have severe condition in spite of their appearance life because people interfer in their life. The majority of famous actors have separate from their wife owing to fales humor. This experience teach me that if celebrated entertainers do not have private life, their life may face harmful situation.
In conclusion, famous people deserve to be respected by other individuals all the time. Not only do they have right to live such as others, but also they need time to become relax. We all should respect them and intervene in their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in other words, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08864265928 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54268582162 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562326869806 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8609585128 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4090909091 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77272727273 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187317088929 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618654057583 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498387559132 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12271248031 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00530414926061 0.0645574589148 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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