Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Internet is a crucial part of our society. As over time, a lot of ways have been created in order to help to community such as different technology or Websites. Some people believe that it is very vital that government allocate more its budget on improving internet access, while others hold an opposite view and assert providing good public transportation is very essential for all citizens. In my opinion, government should spend more money for improving internet access have more beneficial for society for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that by accessing internet, people can do their work in their home instead of going out for every task. By advancing technology and expanding cities, people have a lot of jobs such as regular work or purchasing from shop and so forth. When they have access to internet, they can do them at the same time in one place that really decrease transporting in city. Therefore, government should pay attention to create good condition to access to internet easily that have a lot of advantage such as reducing pollution and doing several work simultaneously. For example, when in Iran country where is Third world, people have less access to internet than other nations. Unfortunately, they have to use physical present to do anything. this huge transportation cause them to use a lot of cars everyday that lead to pollute air. As you can see, it is very important to access to internet that have strong role on air pollution.
Another reason is that society can progress faster when all people have access to internet without any issues. Nowadays, all individuals communicate with each other by using internet comfortably. If one country cannot create infrastructure appropriate throughout society, every person in community face serious problem such as buying goods, trading equipment, and so on. For example, in my country, unluckily, government do not believe that internet have a cardinal role on society and do not spend budget for improving on it. this cause any company cannot to invest any money for advancing technology. Unfortunately, as over time, this event put a lot pressure on life of people due to the fact they cannot community with other nations.
In conclusion, improving public transportation have less important than accessing to internet. that's why I do believe that government should spend more money to improve it. Not only it cause to decrease pollution, but also lead to country progress quickly. All government should advocate to boost internet access all over the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s important than accessing to internet. thats why I do believe that government should...
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Message: Did you mean 'causes'?
Suggestion: causes
...d more money to improve it. Not only it cause to decrease pollution, but also lead to...
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Message: Did you mean 'decreasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
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... money to improve it. Not only it cause to decrease pollution, but also lead to country pro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, therefore, third, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11455847255 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80803995232 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486873508353 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4642438778 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4090909091 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0454545455 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300763171104 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993650613871 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08688082363 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219691348789 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512543161658 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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