Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nobody doubts that success is an essential part of our life. individuals throughout their lifetime follow diverse strategy in order to reaching to their goals that make them pleasure. Some people believe that if everyone want to succeed in a his future job should study in school hardly, however others hold the opposite view. In my opinion, studying hard in school guarantee success in a future profession for two important reasons.
The main reason is that child who studying in school hardly acquire requirement abilities to become successful in future job. Even though several factors like relation, rich, education determine a future occupation whether fail or success, the level of knowledge of every person that attain in school is the most important elemant. For example, when I was in high school, I always took course about business subjects every semaster. every time, I tried to learn all aspect of this subjects, particuarly stock market that needed high knowledge. As over time, I could gain ability to arrive in stock market, so ablities that I could be teached in schoold time helped me to progress in my job. As you can see, having good knowledge from school cause everybody to progress high level of them job.
The another reason is that people can accept in high rank university, where increase their chance to succeed in future profession, by studying hard in school. every management employ individuals according to excellent their resume that they attain throughout school and university time. Obviously, empolyee believe that those who get high grade on all exam are passion and ambitious. In other words, with studing hard in school can go to high rand university. For instance, when I was in high school, I was studying two years in raw in order to go to exam. Fortunately, I could accept in the best university that stand for celevr and elegant student in industry. After then, when I educated from this university, I easily acquired good job because of my resume, including high rank university and high grade in school. this experience taught me that sucess in a future need studying hardly in school.
In conclusion, the level of successful job be affected by studying hard in school, because people attain required abilities and accept in high rank university. Children should study hard in school if they want to progress in their job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1996.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05316455696 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58129045382 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508860759494 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8408883354 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259911026836 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917599067763 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731268862356 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18769126202 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252524403824 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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