Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
deciding what job to do is one of life’s more difficult choices. Individual's future be influenced by the kind of work that they have prefered to do from childhood. Some people believe that children should follow the occupation of their parents, while others hold the oppoisite view. In my view, children's job should not be different form their parents' job for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that chooing job like parent's job, who have a lot of experiences about their job, can help their children to acquir requirement skills quickly. when children work with their parents, gradually they deal with various issues such as how to work well, what is the role of every instrument, and so on. gradually, children get accustomed to prerequisite knowledge and skill not only from diverse situation but also from parent that how solve problems. For example, when my friend was eight years old, she worked with her father, who was very famous carpenter in our hometown becuase he manufactured excellent stuff, in Carpentry market. At first, she really did not know anything and just looked at her father to learn how to work. As over time, when she become 20 years old, she launched her shopping and progress quickly than her friends that picked out new job, which was different from my parent's profession. As you can see, pursuing the same vocation of parent can help children to do their job better because of parent’s experience.
The another reason is that when children have the same job as their parent, they would not need to buy necessary stuff in order to start job. Fortunately, because parent do special job for long time, they gather requirment things that are vital to perform their job. if children choose the parent's job for future life, they do not have to spend their money for instituting job. For instance, when my friends again was working in her father's carpenter market, he bought all instruments that were indispensable. After long years, his father decided to become retired and designated his doughter as manager. she went on father's job and saved tons of money. Consequently, she could afford buying another shop center, which was larger and located the most luxurious place in city, and spreaded her job throughout her hometowm. This experience taught me that doing parent's job help children to progress faster.
In conclusion, choosing job according to parent's job is better that opting new job. Not only does it help children to obtain requirement knowledge from parents, but also it assist children not to need buying new stuff for commencing new job. if children really want to progress faster, they should choose their job like their parent's career.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, look, really, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2251.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98008849558 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52740868459 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522123893805 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2575725918 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.318181818 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5454545455 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22727272727 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.478574248499 0.236089414692 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17383186246 0.076458572812 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135016077697 0.0737576698707 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.346609437672 0.150856017488 230% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535587760387 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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