Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Choosing future career is one of the crucial decision in each person's life. As people's job could affect their feeling and determine their social level, they should pay more attention in choosing it. Some people believe that it is better for children to continue their parent's job, whereas some others hold an opposite attitude. In my view, kids who selecting their family's occupation as their future job benefits a lot for two remarkable reasons.
The main reason is that children could gain more success in their future job by continuing their parent's career. Kids spend most of their life time with their parents and get familiar with various aspects of their job, while they are talking about it in daily life. Furthermore, if they want to find their real interest, they will have opportunity to work as part-time job besides them. So, children could acquire vast knowledge about this career and make better decision for their future job which leads to their prosperity. For example, when I went to high school, I should choose the field of my study which distinguish general field of my future career. Since both of my parents were lawyer and used to argue about their work at home, I had a great amount of information on this job. For becoming sure about my interest, I decided to spend part of my time working as internship for my parents. Although at first it is hard for me to adopt myself with difficulties of this job, this experience provided me with valuable data. Undoubtedly, my today's success as the best lawyer in our country, originated from my consciously decision which gain by choosing my parent's job. As you can see children benefit by continuing their parents career.
Second, kids who selecting their parent's job could use their valuable experience. One of the main pillar of success in one's job is accessing to someone who has vast knowledge on this field and use his advices. When children choose career which is different from their parents, they deprive themselves from this golden chance. For instance, statistics show that kids who continue their family's career have high rate of success in future compare to others initiate new job. Researcher's investigation demonstrates that choosing parent’s career not only would inform children about risk of the job, but also they could work with parents as part-time job and gain some money for starting their own business. Because kids learn from their parent’s failure and success, they could become more successful in this field. If children didn't continue their parent's occupation, they wouldn't be prosperous in future.
In conclusion, I do believe that it is beneficial for children to selecting jobs similar to their parents. Not only do they become more successful in their future job, but they also could use their parents work experience. I think parents should encourage kids to continuing their job for having better future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... is one of the crucial decision in each persons life. As peoples job could affect their...
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Suggestion: lifetime
...arents career. Kids spend most of their life time with their parents and get familiar wit...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... which gain by choosing my parents job. As you can see children benefit by continu...
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Suggestion: one's
...e. One of the main pillar of success in ones job is accessing to someone who has vas...
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...e successful in this field. If children didnt continue their parents occupation, they...
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...continue their parents occupation, they wouldnt be prosperous in future. In conclu...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... occupation, they wouldnt be prosperous in future. In conclusion, I do believe that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, whereas, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, talking about, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2451.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04320987654 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53655638113 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448559670782 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.2862361025 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.125 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.434796231434 0.236089414692 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170530844725 0.076458572812 223% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777999152403 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.346428332348 0.150856017488 230% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029510679528 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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