Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
It goes without saying that in this competitive world we live, parents are worried about the future of their children and are trying to mature them in the best way in which children prepare for their future as perfectly as possible. While some people believe that teenagers should take a part-time job, others hold the opposite view that it is not beneficial for children to work at teenage ages. Personally speaking, I firmly concur with the former group. To substantiate my point of view, two reasons are explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, thanks to taking part-time job leads, teenagers will appreciate their money and can learn about how to manage their money in their future. To clarify, in this comfortable era, most of the teenager get money from their parents without any attempt. So, most of the time they spend their cash on unnecessary things and waste money because they do not know the fact that earning money is too hard, and their parents have to work a lot of hours to make money. However, if teenagers work in a part-time career, they will learn that they should try drastically hard to make a little money. Therefore, they spend their cash just on their basic needs and save a lot part of their income.
Secondly, taking part-time work provides teenagers more opportunities to find a high-paid job in the future because they have a lot of skills and even they can choose one of these partial work as major work in the future. To clarify, children have a lot amount of time at teenage years and do not what they should do, so they will wast these golden times. On the other hand, they can learn new work at juvenile ages in order to prepare in the future. To put a more vivid picture, should they use these times to learn new skills, they have more opportunities in future jobs and have a chance to be more successful among their peers.
In conclusion, taking two reasons mentioned above into account, I do believe that children should be required to work a part-time job at juvenile ages. By taking a part-time career not only teenagers will appreciate their money but also they have more opportunities for their future jobs. (35 min)
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 154, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... to manage their money in their future. To clarify, in this comfortable era, most ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67885117493 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42495361399 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475195822454 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.2172319314 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.466666667 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5333333333 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297511406765 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109140743986 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665313136919 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211750985328 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562424602997 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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