Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinion of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to young people than they are to older people.
It is generally accepted that we need to communication with all types of people such as young and old people because this issue helps us for improving our knowledge in different and critical matters. However some people believe that celebrities always tend to work with young people. On the other hand, other people do not think so. It is very difficult for us to prefer one to another because both of them have their advantages and disadvantage. As a matter of fact, I think that several people, who are famous individuals like entertainers and athletes, be able to detect several positive characters among young people because of a couple of reasons.
In the beginning, one of primary reasons is that young people is a great source of energy who will capable of doing many considerable tasks during the day. In fact, they are an inseparable part of our society. Particularly, known people think that they can provide an appropriate ground in other to the progress of themselves. For example, must of coaches, who are well known people in all kind of sports, believe that young athletes have not only impetus but also power to do their activities. Although, their experiences are not sufficient in a specific sport, they like devoting many parts of their life to reach their goals. Given this issue, the must of coaches will able to progress in their work by accessing their students to a great level related to sport.
Second, the most persuasive point is that some celebrities tend to work with people who have a great them of creatively. To be frank, the creative is a significant attribute of young people. Furthermore, their features are supported by celebrities because they can expand their ideas about several new subjects. For example, some filmmakers, who always work with some new actors or actress that like getting famous in cinema, believe that young people can create a new situation in sense by their creative. In fact, they will able to use their skills in same condition; nevertheless, the ability of filmmakers in selecting some great young people is not also essential but also vital; the creative of young people is one of the important characters of them.
From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that the creative and energy is tow notable factors for young people that provide an great condition to create interest among celebrities in other to work them. Generally speaking, if some celebrities have two options to select young and old people, they obviously will prefer to choice young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, well, for example, i think, in fact, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93039443155 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64296538264 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46403712297 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8938799894 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.055555556 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9444444444 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94444444444 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210966459806 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764891096605 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471369632968 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142796681989 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428510141815 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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