Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with the children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
It is generally accepted that children need to spend their time with their parents owing to their parents can introduce as a good friend. However, some people believe that parents, who do not have a lot of time, must use their times for doing some fun activities, such as playing games or sport. On other hand, other people do not think so. It is very difficult for us to prefer one to another because both of them have their advantages and disadvantages. As matter of fact, I prefer that some parents dedicate the piece of their times for helping their children in other to do their assignments together for two important reasons.
In the beginning, I would like to mention that parents not only can effect on their children but also can teach many great habits to them. One of the important treatments that children can learn of their children is the management of time. For instance, when I studied at high school, the work hours of my mother was around 10 hours. Although this time was not enough for my mother who do some daily activity, she was able to divide her time to some parts that help me to do my homework as an important part. In fact, this issue helps me to learn how can manage my time during the day. Hence, my assignments were done by helping my mother.
Second, it is undeniable that each family can help their kids for improving the condition of them at school. If some parents, who spend lots of their time in outside, devoted the part of their time to their children, they can see the progress of them. For instance, before my mother helped me to do my daily assignment, I had not capable to reach a great score in my courses. I remember that the score of my math course was too low; therefore, my father who was professor’s math at university decides to teach me some knowledge about mathematical; although he always stayed at university too late. Finally, both of us were so pleasant because my score was improved.
For what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that parents, who spend a part of their time for helping their children; nevertheless, they have not enough time during day, will able to teach many thing to their children. All in all, children can learn how manage their as well as their parents. Besides, they can improve their knowledge in some course by helping of their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'many things'.
Suggestion: many things
...ugh time during day, will able to teach many thing to their children. All in all, children...
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Line 4, column 331, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... as well as their parents. Besides, they can improve their knowledge in some cour...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for instance, in fact, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57819905213 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47260773243 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471563981043 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3601156207 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.684210526 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2105263158 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.68421052632 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24671930708 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0935088377532 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109690684578 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171829938561 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108969232348 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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