Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with the children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
It is generally accepted that children need to spend their time with their parents owing to their parents can introduce as a good friend. However, some people believe that parents, who do not have a lot of time, must use their times for doing some fun activities, such as playing games or sport. On the other hands, other people do not think so. It is very difficult for us to prefer one to another because both of them have their advantages and disadvantages. As matter of fact, I prefer that some parents dedicate the piece of their times for helping their children in other to do their assignments together for two important reasons.
In the beginning, I would like to mention that parents not only have a useful effect on their children but also can teach many great habits to them by their behavior. One of the important treatments that children can learn from their parents is the management of time. For instance, when I studied at high school, the work hours of my mother was around 10 hours. Although this time was not enough for my mother who does some daily activities, she was able to divide her time between some parts that to help me to do my homework as an important part. In fact, this issue provides an apt ground for learning time management during the day. Hence, my assignments were done by helping my mother.
Second, it is undeniable that each family can help their kids by improving the condition of them at school. If some parents, who spend lots of their time in outside, devoted the part of their time to their children, they can see the progress of them. For instance, before my mother helped me to do my daily assignment, I had not capable to reach a great score in my courses. I remember that the score of my math course was too low; therefore, my father who was professor’s math at university decides to teach me some knowledge about mathematical; although he always stayed at university too late. Finally, both of us were so pleased because my score was improved.
For what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that parents, who spend a part of their time for helping their children; nevertheless, they have not enough time during the day, will able to teach many things to their children. All in all, children can learn how to manage their as well as their parents. Besides, they can improve the knowledge about their course by helping their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 607, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to time'
Suggestion: to time
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for instance, in fact, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6317016317 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49464082918 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480186480186 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5072106338 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.578947368 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5789473684 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.68421052632 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252298830854 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946357970587 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109014917128 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17683734319 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10907107325 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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