do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinion of celebrities are more important to younger people than they are for older people.
It is established beyond any doubt that celebrities have a vital role in society and they can become a leader of some important groups in their country. Some people believe that they have more influence on young people. While others don't think so. If I were to tell my opinion I would definitely tell that they have a foremost effect on young people. I will explore my reasons in the following essay.
To begin with, one should take into account the fact that young people especially teenagers looking for a hero in their life. As a result, when they find a celebrity who is acceptable they not only admire him but also follow him. Although they can follow their parents as their heroes, they seldom do that because they believe the same age celebrities are more appropriate than their parents because their appealing character is fascinating for them. My notion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my experience. When I was in high school I saw an action series and I was so interested in the behavior of the first role of that series so, after a while, I started to imitated his acting because I wanted to become a person like him. While my mother and father didn't have any sense about that actor.
Another remarkable reason is that old and experienced people have their own methods for life and they don't want to be affected by someone else. Because of their age, they need relaxation and they prefer to have a calm and constant life without any change. They not only don't accept famous people but also sometimes prefer to notice their friends and family don't admire them in order to prevent their influence on society. In contrast, young people always want to experience new events in their life. My grandfather is a compelling example and demonstrates this fact better. When I was imitating and admiring that actor my grandfather became angry and told me you can follow your parents rather than this person. He believed that we can use the experience of our parents or our old people in our family to become a successful person.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that celebrities have more effect on young people rather than old people because young adults seek for an idol in their life and celebrities are the best choice for them. Old people believe that they can use their experience in their life and they think their life doesn't need to be affected by anyone.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, while, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69285714286 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43420914255 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480952380952 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5676208171 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.55 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229725232163 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729815626099 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618200428985 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161709840801 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264792491237 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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