some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade.do you agree or disagree?
There is no shortage of debate that all parents wish the best for their children and provide all amenity for them to succeed in their education. A controversial question that arises here is whether motivating children with money to get high rank is appropriate or it can be harmful to them. If I were to choose, I would encourage my children with money because of the following reasons.
To begin with, one should take into account the fact that money is the best motivation for people in all works. As a result, if parents pay money to their children for their marks, they will definitely work hard to get high marks. actually, many students are not interested in studying and lessons so they need the motivation to work and money is the best thing for them.my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my personal experience. When I was children, I never like mathematic and I thought it's a usefulness lesson in my life so I never studied it, as a result, my marks was ridiculous but when my father told me if you try and study math I will pay you money, I not only read it carefully but also I gradually became the firs mark in my class.
Another remarkable reason is that by paying children money for their grades, they notice about the importance of education and their lessons. it's an inevitable fact that education has a critical role in children's future and their job opportunities. This fact can be accentuated by parents with their prise. for instance, When I was a child, I didn't like university and I believed that it's a kind of wasting time. When I accepted in a high-rank university my father gave me half of his income and it was unbelievable for me but it has illustrated me about the importance of education and I have noticed about its role in my life because I believe my parents are more experienced than me so they never make wrong decisions.
in conclusion, I strongly believe that paying money to children for their grades is a proper way because it's motive them to try more also illustrate the importance of education for them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, so, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1702.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58760107817 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68732748109 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487870619946 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.142734232 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.923076923 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5384615385 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244981592114 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108120860391 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615516697855 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175271444685 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233009307574 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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