Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People response differently to different situations. Some believe in a particular thing, others may think many times, and do some researches before proceeding. In my opinion, I believe that the opinions of celebrities are more important for young people than for the older people. And I have a couple of convincing reasons that made me agree to this statement.
The first reason associated with that young people spend more time watching TV and other social media, Which make them more exposed to those celebrities, and consider them as their role model. For instance, My 16 years old niece watched her favorite reality show for 2 hours every day, and she never missed an episode. She told me that her favorite actress was in this show. Also, this celebrity was marketing for a new make up brand. And she wanted to try her shadow pallet so bad. As a result, her mother bought her what she wants. Although, her mother does not care about the brand. Thus, the fact that young people spend more time on TV, will make them more exposed to their favorite actress and consider him as their role model.
Another reason related to the idea that young people are immature enough to decide what is better for them. So, as long as their famous entertainer said this good for them they will believe them. which means they affected faster than older people by those famous people. For example, I read an article in the news paper saying that 2 young girls had a rash from using certain moisturizing product, and it turns out that this product advertised by Kim Kantian the famous teenager girl. However, old people think many times before they do anything.
As a conclusion, The words that come from a well-known people are more heard by young people than older ones, this is because younger people are spending more time watching TV and Follow their crush. In addition young people are immature and they just follow what their favorite actress lead without thinking about the outcomes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78070175439 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28382040488 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535087719298 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1854778624 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0526315789 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221794567055 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693217604337 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710674511844 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153826138753 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547685479251 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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