Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern world, thanks to the internet and other sources of information, celebrities express their opinion in different situations. Their opinion has various importance for different people. As far as I am concerned, I totally believe that the famous peoples' opinions are more important for young people compared to elderlies. The reasons why I think so will be elaborated upon hereunder.
First, young people see celebrities as role models and listen to their opinions because they want to be like celebrities. I mean, many young people want to be like famous basketball or football players. Therefore, when they state their opinion about an issue, young people accept it and even do as they say. Furthermore, Young people usually love celebrities, such as movie stars and listen to them anyway. On the other hand, older people are generally more mature and do not care about celebrities' opinions. They are often older than football or basketball players and see them as some athletes, nothing more. When they hear celebrities' views, they just think of it as other peoples' opinions.
Second, because of the fame and popularity of celebrities, they can easily influence young people. Almost every young person likes famous athletes, and if they allege their opinion, youngs feel obligated to pay attention. They have this feeling because they do not want to be seen as a weird person who disagrees with popular personalities. If they do not care about celebrities' opinions, they feel left-out from their peers. My own example illustrates this reality. About twenty years ago, when I was a child, there was a famous football player named Ronaldo. He played for Brazil national team and was the best in the world at that time. He had a famous hair cut, which he shaved all his head except for a little part above the head. At first look, it was ridiculous, but since he was very popular, everyone imitated it. My father did not like it and told me that he would not let me make my head like him. However, when I went out to play with my friends, they did not play with me and thought that I do not like Ronaldo. So I had to emulate his haircut so that my friends accept me as a part of them.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I strongly believe that celebrities' ideas and opinions are crucial for young people rather than for olds. It is because they love those personalities and want to be like them. Also, they get influenced by their popularity.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, except for, i mean, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79439252336 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56988104475 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511682242991 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.2903520243 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.9230769231 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4615384615 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80769230769 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259313010401 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0775444491866 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608666649723 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174600497285 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599276327103 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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