Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without any doubt, the epoch-making invention of the internet has altered numerous aspects of humans' lives. Youth are information bombording through the social medias which causes to hold different perspective toward the global's issues. As far as I'm concerned, due to the internet access, the celebrities have more influence on young people than old people.
To begin with, considering the various virtual platforms such as Facebook, Instageram , and so forth, juveniles's attentions are captured by many active celebrities in these media. By displaying attractive parts of their lives, celebrities are successful to allure youngsters, and they can inculcate in youth' mind whatever they want. Consequently, nither parents nor grangparents have importance for their children anymore. My personal experinec is a persuasive axample of what I mean. My younger brother has a role model among the athletes and he follows every social media's pages that this football player has. He madly believes in him and puts the posters of their team's picture on all of his rooms' walls. For the prevoius peresidental election, the mentioned football player encouaregd to ban the election. As a result, my brother was kept saying we should not vote in that election. He didn't consider my paranet's opinion and he persisted on his decision made base on the effect of his beloved athlete. This example demonstrates how th internet affects young people and they focus on the celebrities' opinions rather than their ansectors'.
Moreover, the more powerful education that adolescents nawadayes have is also responsible for the importance of celebrities' opinion rather than older's considerations. Youth are becoming more aware about a variety of subjects through their educations which leads to the fact that they hardly ever accept the elderly' opinion. They believe that older people have out-dated knowledge which don't fit to the novelites of the t
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, moreover, so, i mean, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38079470199 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85840972562 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.635761589404 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9276525914 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.5625 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.875 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204061751458 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579065353078 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060796671211 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132318246373 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043856052631 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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