Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There are numerous concealed and conspicuous factors and elements which are inextricably interwoven with one another that affect the people's attitudes, especially the young. In today world of media, celebrities are one of these elements, a crucial one. As far as the effect of these famous persons on people is concerned, some are of the opinion that they influence juveniles less than adults, while others believe otherwise. I-for one- subscribe to the latter idea on the ground that teenagers need role models, they are much more exposed to these materials, and they don't have enough experience to identify the truth.
To begin with, young people need role models in their life to imitate their actions. Having a person who they praise their works and accomplishments, enables teenagers to set objectives for themselves and try to be as successful as their idol. For example, my nephew knows the Neymar as his ideal person and has many pictures of him in his room and even he uses Neymar's hair style as his favorite. However, older people do not consider renowned persons as their role model.
Secondly, much of the impact of celebrities on people come from the social media, where juveniles are much more active than their parents. Older people usually have been preoccupied by their jobs and tasks they need to perform during a day, while the young spend so much time in social media and are more impacted by the materials produced by famous people, like photos, footages, and even advertisements.
The last but not the least reason which reinforces the preceding assertion that the impact of celebrities on teenagers are more than that on the older people is that young people cannot differentiate the reality from show off most of the time. For instance, when a famous person shares a luxury picture from his breakfast, the young will consider that the truth of his life, while the more experienced persons will know that it is just for show off and life has so many difficulties that everyone should encounter with.
All in all, taken into account what was already mentioned, I do believe that younger people are more vulnerable to the celebrities' influence because they need someone to praise, they are more involved with famous people materials, their lacking life experience makes them naive in believing everything they see. I think it is time for parents to come to their senses and assist their children to become more aware of this impact, so it won’t have a detrimental effect on their future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...re exposed to these materials, and they dont have enough experience to identify the ...
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Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put between 'have' and 'been'.
Suggestion: have usually been
...active than their parents. Older people usually have been preoccupied by their jobs and tasks the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2094.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95035460993 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55840899345 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517730496454 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.4337498123 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.571428571 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2142857143 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231366486823 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900082670902 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632057977318 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138387897997 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268556004771 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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