Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of social medias over the world, some persons get fames and be well-known. Follow them, ordinary people begin to imitate their lifestyle wish to get fames one day. The question here is whether the affect of celebrities on older people is as same as the youngers? There may seem to be controversy at first glance; However, I significantly concur that the well-known influences on the youngs is more obviously. I have some compelling reasons mentioned in the following paragraphs.
First, older people do not use social medias like yonger do. The most of them grow in the situation where is not any electeronic vessels. They never involve in internet actions in their life such youngers which most of them can continue their life without their phones. The olders exploit from phones for some rudimentory task like calling to their children, giving massages from their peer, or doing some of their administrative works. Most of the aged people can't undrestand very simple phone's performance.
Second, the olders did their life. They haven't eager to follow celebrities to know their life. On the other hand, young people have incredible enthusiam to learn how to live. For example, I follow some celebrities in social media that they work on civil engineering as a young people. The paramost goal of me is learn to how I should perform in continue of my life to be prosperous. They are living in my ideal future so I can get some information and imagine the best lifestyle I could have. This inspiretion, encourage me to work diligent in the way of my dreams. But, the olders wouldn't have a same prespective. They don't have a big dream like me to encourage them. They want to continue their life in peace.
In sum, I believe that olders don't follow famous enternainers or athletes as same the youngers follow them. However, They enjoy only from plays and performs of the well-knowns. I think there is some reasons for youngers to follow specific persons lifestyle. The youngers want to be famous one day. But, the olders are living at the ends of their lifes so they don't have tremendous dream. In conjunction with, the olders don't know how to exert electronic objects like mobile and laptop.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, thus, well, for example, i think, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83905013193 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61058294422 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498680738786 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.4250540758 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.5384615385 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5769230769 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57692307692 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214949928587 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660471765939 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561651693335 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140978766705 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381305465733 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.2 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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