Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Recently, there has been a ton of debate on whether opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people than the older people. Personally, I am of the opinion that opinions of celebrities have more impact on younger people. I think of this way because of two reasons, which I will explore in this essay.

First of all, children are more likely to be influenced by perspectives of celebrities. Obviously, since younger people have spent most of their life at school, they do not have enough experience in real word and lack the ability of critical thinking. Therefore, they have the tendency to follow the fashion, which is usually defined by famous people, while older people who have been practiced in the society for a long time, usually make decisions based on their own thoughts. This is best demonstrated by a study conducted by Peking university which is a top ranked institution in China. The result shows that more than half of younger people in the city believes that they must follow and support their idols without judgement. As we can see, how easily children can be impacted by opinions they received.

Secondly, young people have more chance to access to the quotations of the celebrities and get affected by them. Evidently, with the development of modern technology younger adults get the information from the internet , where opinions of celebrities are usually transmitted, far more than the older generation. For example, results from the study mentioned previously show that more than 50% of the news on the internet is about celebrities, and the readers of those new are mostly younger children at ages between ten to thirty. This clearly demonstrated that how limited available information for younger people are.

In conclusion, I am fully convinced that younger people are prone to be influenced by opinions of celebrities. This is because children do not have enough experience to prevent being affected by others and because they are concerns more in about celebrities.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ts get the information from the internet , where opinions of celebrities are usual...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08761329305 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78426018985 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510574018127 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7910265868 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.266666667 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0666666667 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291563737936 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106478932174 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770213141541 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187453033491 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382012398652 0.0645574589148 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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