Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern generation, famous people are at first level for young people. Their way can be the way the young generation will follow because these celebrities are one big part of their entertainment in the day long. On the other hand, the old generation does not care about these things that much; Thus, We can see young people gibe more attention than older people. I will explain my reasons in the following paragraph.
The first and most important thing is, The celebrity's lifestyle and behaviors are open to the public. Therefore young people, especially, teenagers are sensitive about these topics and they want to be like them, dress like them, behave like them or speak like them. Enhance, famous artists or athletes, and other celebrities are important for them.
the second reason is that these people are successful in people's eyes. Mostly, in young people's eyes. They are famous and everybody knows them and they are rich, as well. In consider, young people, who want to find their ways, just want to be something good like the person that they admire. First-person, most of the time is a celebrity, THerefore these group of society is more important for young people.
Another point that I want to mention is, If we look from the other side of the road, We can see in all societies the young generation is more sensitive than the old ones. why it is like this?! As a young person, I think people of my age or in my generation, they don't find their life yet. Thus, they just imagine how it could be if I was like him/ her. We imagine and we just follow the person and the person going to be important for us and we will never know how! Until we make our own life perfectly. Until that, we support the celebrities and following them but abruptly we have our own business and life and we are in middle age, thus, those people aren't important for us anymore.
in conclusion, The sensitive personality of young people and have not a suitable and stable life can be a reason for pay attention to celebrities than the older generation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, so, therefore, thus, well, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60821917808 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44530946404 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452054794521 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1749684867 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4444444444 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2777777778 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188055291278 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790492703013 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447780102127 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125474127097 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036415939302 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.7 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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