Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Over the past decades, the issue of whether children should learn financial responsiblity among their young age has received a great deal of attention from parents and psychologists. Although some may argue that exposing children to manage their own money can be stressful, I as well as many others believe that educating children to manage their own money as young age could learn to know the value of money and might bloomed their talent in businesses. I am of the opinion that both of the mentioned viewpoints have their own merits and drawbacks, and the following explanations will further elaborate on this perspective.
First and foremost, beyond the shadow of doubt, Throughout the history money has played a crucial role in people’s life. as the culture evolves, the parents get more concern about educating children to learn the value of the money. getting a specific amount of money each month to the children, parents can satisfied their concern. by doing this, children can learn to spending money on a specific amount and knowing the value of the money. he/she understand they can just spend their money on specific stuffs. for the porpuse of the illustration, I have a cousine who is 8 years old and have received a specific amount of money each month. she manage every month which doll or toy she could buy and she doesn’t waste her money on unnecessary things.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that talent is a matter which should be discovered and developed. children who have facing to responsible for their own money might be able to learn how to get more money on the future. According to the research conducted by a american psychology institute, children who become familiar with managing money on their own childhood will be more successful in their future due to the fact that they investigate and estimate alot of solution which bring them more money. As a result, they can find their talent on business or other majors.
On the other hand, it is occasionally said that exposing children at young age in controling their money could be harmful for their spirits. Some people stated that childhood should not be mixed with adulthood time. Children should have their sweet childhood and should njot involved with financial responsibility and its stresses. this issue has been bone of contention over the past decades.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one can draw the conclusion that educating children on financial responsiblity is a great issue due to the understanding the value of money and finding their talents on increasing their income on future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, so, well, in brief, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2196.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04827586207 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77499927097 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468965517241 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.2201895903 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.578947368 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8947368421 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78947368421 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362504293786 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116956239697 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825599546565 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218360005616 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809230687126 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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