Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Coincident with most people's notion is my heartfelt belief that children should learn to manage their own money at a younger age. I would definitely think that it is a better approach for them to become financially responsible adults. It is my firm belief that this way has suitable effects on their personality and also is great time to become habit on the children's behavior for better lifestyle in the future. For a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
My primary reason is that children at young age have not complete personality compared with adult people. This property help children to be more flexible in learning and start to manage their own money. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. You see when I was a little girl my father gave me certain money every month and I learn from young age to spend my money for necessary requirements. As a result, I am very well in management of my financial issues.
Secondly, learning how to manage your money is a necessary lesson and childhood is best time for doing it to become a habit. Drawing from my own experiment my brother manages his financial issues in the best ways and when we ask about his critical keys he admits that just do it and I think this skill gain from his childhood. So, with this approach when children grow up there be financially responsible adult automatically.
In light of the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that children should learn to manage their money at younger age.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, secondly, so, well, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1306.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 275.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74909090909 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73106161056 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541818181818 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.156464717 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.461538462 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1538461538 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46153846154 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329747118851 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130580844482 0.076458572812 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836594474617 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218333473179 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222533254847 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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