Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
In today's busy world, it becomes challenging for parents to support an ideal work-life balance. As a result, the children suffer feeling deprived of the parental care they deserve. Thus, a family may wonder how they can teach their child to become responsible in life? Some people believe they should allow them to deal with their finances. I support this idea as it will discipline the child and will make them independent in life.
A disciplined person will always outshine in his career and succeed in achieving his goals. To become a person of his dream, one needs to be independent at a very early age. It has been an established fact that Being in charge of his own finances will teach him the value of money and will become responsible, preventing him from spending money randomly. For instance, when i was in high school, i worked as a librarian after school hours and the money i received made me feel proud and as a reward for my hard work, which made me feel motivated to work harder and kept me driven towards my goal.
With a positive attitude and sharp focus towards the end goal, a child can fund his college education, in the long run, he can build his empire, buy his long-cherished dream car, etc. For example, my aunt has been an independent, self-driven person from childhood, who lived a minimalistic life and saved money for the future, avoiding unnecessary expenses. Today she is a well-known entrepreneur who successfully owns her own house in the beautiful city of New York and drives her dream car and lives by the principles she learned during childhood.
In conclusion, children become well behaved, matured, and disciplined in life if they are in charge of their finances at a very young age of life. Researches have shown that these are the people who become successful in life and do good for society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1521.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73831775701 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67053247029 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588785046729 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3401356123 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.642857143 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9285714286 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161089197296 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586237320863 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487796943733 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101746768091 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397209592043 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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