Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Children are coming of age by means of many valuable experiences and knowledges acquired through their families. In fact, one aspect of adulting is the financial literacy which is not normally taught in schools and it is critical to obtain monetary information during childhood. In this case, I strongly think that children should be allowed to manage their budget to become financially independent and reliable.
To begin with, family provides a great opportunity for children to learn and flourish. As a matter of fact, schools are suffering from lacking of worthwhile financial courses. Consequently, parents are playing a crucial role for children to become financially literate. My own experience is a compelling example of what I mean. When I was an adolescence, my father provided me with a joint bank account and gave me the chance of managing my allowance. For first months it was truly hard for me to manage my account, but after several months, I was able to even save a good deal of money and I used my saving to buy a birthday gift for my mother. Now, after ten years I have learnt to be responsible for my debts and assets and I owe this capability to my father and I appreciate him.
In the other hand, given a type of restricted family which hardly ever allow their children to manage their money. As a result, their children never could have the chance of learning monetary knowledge. Therefore, in their adulthood, they would become overwhelming by economic problems, they cannot manage their bills and taxes and it has many aftermaths which prevent them to, financially, advance. For instance, I had a bold memory about a friend of mine. In the university, she used to stay at dorm but because of her economic illiterate, in spite of her acceptable income, she couldn't afford her bills and came to stay with me. After many times spending together, I taught her how to manage her income and, lastly, she could live independently, again.
To recap, it is essential for all children to learn how to be responsible for their budget and I firmly believe that this could happen by means of parents' help. They should give the permission to their children to control their own money which is important and imperative for their future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, lastly, therefore, while, for instance, i mean, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result, in spite of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1865.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83160621762 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74154106492 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536269430052 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7432869575 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.611111111 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227653245161 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760995441465 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477871648488 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146616977598 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261693359903 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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