Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the technologically advanced modern world, today globalization have dominated worldwide. As a result, people can visualise their future and aspire for their dream better than earlier days. Therefore, some people believe it is wiser for children to become self dependent and handle their own finances to become a financially independent at an older age. I ardently assert that it is always a noble practice to lead the young children to become self aware and deal with their own money, so that at a later age they become highly responsible and stable financially. In the following paragraphs, I will illustrate on three main reasons for my belief.
First of all, in our contemporary world, majority of people live in a nuclear family. As a result, many children are deprived of the attention they deserve compared to a decade earlier. Thus, it is a wiser idea to help the children understand the need of managing their own money at an early age. Various researches have demonstrated that independent child live a disciplined life. This healthy practice help them maintain a sharp focus towards their goal, and therefore, they are found to be successful in life. For instance, when I was eleven years old, I used to work in the school library after school to manage my own tuition expenses. Since my parents encouraged me to become independent at an early age, the hard earned money acted as a motivation to study hard in life and achieve a bigger goal.
Secondly, a financially independent child is less likely to lose focus from the long term goal. Hence, these young people become better at strategising their work, which plays a significant role in climbing the ladder of becoming financially sound at an earlier age compared to their peers. For example, during my graduation days, I was highly strategic on spending money and always paid attention not to spend money unnecessarily. On the otherhand, my friends often spent money on buying expensive gadgets and and clothes. It was seen that they were easily distracted in classes. As a result, they lost focus from the primary goal, and failed to become responsible and succeeed in life.
In summation, it is highly advantageous for parents to teach their children to become financially independent at a very nascent stage of life. This healthy practice will help the child to become disciplined and focused and have a strategic approach towards their goal in life. Several researches have already proved that these children manage to secure high grades and become financially sound compared to their peers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 508, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
...spent money on buying expensive gadgets and and clothes. It was seen that they were eas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2148.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03044496487 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77872380614 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491803278689 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8625033641 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.285714286 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259148655453 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766556309867 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724562069251 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176625907447 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434921357172 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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