Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In our contemporary world, advancements in technology and development of the internet service had a prominent impact on human lives. The authenticity of the information pouring from these sources, had led to improvement in the quality of education in schools and colleges. Therefore, parents are highly concerned that their children should not spend too much time elsewhere, other than studying. There are two school of thoughts on the idea that students must take a break period of one year after completing high school, and before joining university courses. Although some people consent to this theory, others oppose the idea. However, I ardently assert that, it is never a wiser decision to take an extended vacation immediately after completing his school, and before beginning the university courses. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my belief, on the most outstanding and cogent grounds.
First of all, in current scenario, acquiring knowledge is not a toiling task, however, retaining the information for a long period of time is a real challenge. The society rewards only those, who can achieve success by working consistently towards their goal without taking any significant time off. This is mainly because the society knows that people get distracted from their goal, if they are away for a significant period of time. For instance, after graduation high school, immediately before enrolling for university courses, I opted for working at a computer centre for one year, to gain experience in the field. This unwise decision costed me for life time, after my post graduation from university, when I apply for a job, the one year break from education raises a red flag, and it creates a negative impression on the employers about me as an applicant. Therefore, It is a wiser decision to immediately begin university education after high school.
Furthermore, studying at a university can prove to be a life changing experience. Students must not underestimate the importance of an advanced and thorough research on the subjects and its future prospects, before enrolling for university courses. These plethora of research and collection of data is time consuming activity. Therefore one must not shift their focus anywhere else after high school. Rather they should seek help from several experienced people who have an expertise in this area. For example, my sister was highly ambitious to become a health care professional. Therefore, she spent additional hours devising a concrete plan with the help of a famous cardiologist, to work towards securing a cardiology major at AIIMS, Delhi. Had she not planned it early, she must have failed miserably.
In conclusion, time is money. Therefore, students should be cautious about how they spent their most valuable time, especially during the early days of their career. One must devise a solid plan to begin their university education immediately after high school rather than spending on long vacation, so that they can retain the knowledge gained and save time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...eld. This unwise decision costed me for life time, after my post graduation from universi...
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Message: Did you mean 'this plethora' or 'These plethoras'?
Suggestion: This plethora; These plethoras
...efore enrolling for university courses. These plethora of research and collection of data is t...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ion of data is time consuming activity. Therefore one must not shift their focus anywhere...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2563.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26283367556 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86319475571 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5318275154 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 814.5 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5974769744 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.791666667 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2916666667 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226310402418 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063023900144 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624465679609 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144386260481 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294882750687 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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