Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents can no longer control what their children do; their behavior gets more affected by
television, movies, and other influences from outside the home.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, bringing up a child is a challenging issue for parents due to existence of media, films, and other things which can affect children’s behaviors. I, however, believe that parents still can control their children’s acts and morality properly. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, parents can restrict their children access to certain media which they may find inappropriate for their children. Most of TV programs and movies are labeled with a sign which informs parents for what age group this program is suitable; according to this label, parents can decide whether their children should be allowed to see this program or not. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I was a kid, I used to play a lot of video games, there were several games in the market at the time, some of which had an explicit violent content. My parent always checked every game for its age limit, if the game was suitable for my age, they let me play it, otherwise, they did not.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that children mostly spend their time with the family and they are more likely to behave according to what their parent do. In fact, although they may be influenced by factors from outside the home, the major factors which form personality of a child is inside the home. If parents behave properly, their children behave in the same way, and media or other people cannot have a significant impact on them. For example, in my childhood, sometimes I heard some words from people that did not know their meaning, but I never used them because I had never heard them from my parent, and I knew that this words probably mean bad and I must not repeat them.
In conclusion, I believe that parents still have control over their children’s behavior because they can choose the content which is accessible for their children, and children are more likely to behave like their parent rather than other people.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, still, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80172413793 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47049406599 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548850574713 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.0482354007 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.538461538 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7692307692 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286716140395 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109497486221 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815332176337 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194197578808 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047631649546 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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