Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents can no longer control what their children do; their behavior gets more affected by
television, movies, and other influences from outside the home.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, bringing up a child is a challenging issue for parents due to existence of media, films, and other factors which can affect children’s behaviors. I, however, believe that parents still can control their children’s behaviorism efficiently. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, parents can restrict their children’s access to certain media which they may find inappropriate for them. Most TV programs and movies are rated which informs parents for what age group this program is appropriate; according to this rating, parents can decide whether their children should be allowed to see this program or not. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I was a kid, I used to play a lot of video games; there were several games on the market at the time, some of which had violent contents. My parent always checked rating of every games I wanted to play; if the game was suitable for my age, they would let me play it, otherwise, they would not.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that children mostly spend their time with their family and they are more likely to behave similar to how their parent do. In fact, although they may be influenced by factors from outside the home, the major factors which form personality of a child are inside the home. If parents behave appropriately, their children behave in the same way, and media or other people cannot have a significant impact on them. For example, in my childhood, sometimes I heard some words from people that did not know their meaning, but I never used them because I had never heard them from my parent. In this way, my parent overcame the negative effects of other people on my upbringing by their right behavior.
In conclusion, I believe that parents still have control over their children’s behavior because they can choose the contents which are accessible for their children, and children are more likely to behave like their parent rather than other people.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, still, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92485549133 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60094411468 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546242774566 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2818586184 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.714285714 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7142857143 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29291868579 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110263129793 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798124520985 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19974643594 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595754348124 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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