Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than parents in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Involvement of parents in their children's educational life is something that got so much attention in recent years. It is considered so important since it affect the future of any child in any family. Some people think that parents role in their children's education increase recently. However, some other folks regarded that they do not have so big influence in their children's education. In my view, I believe that parents share in educational condition of their children radically growed in these years due to two reasons that I explain.
First, the nature of works and occupations changed totally in these years. Companies and industries pay significant attention to research and academic education, since currently it has much more impact on success of a business activity. So, parents who work now in places like those, understand that education is important and encourage their children to continue their education. For example, my friend Jim whose parents work in a biological company, used to work in an old chemical factory before. He liked to study just until high school and after that he intended to find a job for himself and begin his independent life and career. On the other hand, his parents who have not interfered with their son's decisions any time before had no objection about this plan, until they switched their occupation lately and recruited in a biological sector company where they found out that education can alter their son's life significantly. So, they decided to have a stronger role in their son's educational future and told him that he should attend university in order to find a better prestigous job after his graduation hopefully. You noticed that how parents point of view changed by their own evolvement in their career which happens frequently in recent period, as the technology advances and define new roles for its workers which increase their vigilance about learing and education accordingly.
Second, time is another vital factor that leads to parents better involvement in their children's education. In the past, families mostly consisted of many off springs and grand parents also lived with the core family. As a result the number of people in a normal family back then was about 5 to 6 person which is the nature of extended families. On the other hand, it limited the time that parents can spend with each of their sons and daughters. They can only manage some their activities and the time that they can put for their children's education was greatly restricted. But, nowadys organization of family especially the number of children declined fundamentally. So, parents have more time to supervise their children's education.
In conclusion, parents’ role in their children's education is so crucial and can not be ignored. In these recent decades their involvement increased rapidly because of their parents new positions in their occupations and the number of family members which reduced in modern families. So, parents can share much time with their children and pay attention to their education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 219, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...arents also lived with the core family. As a result the number of people in a norm...
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Line 9, column 298, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...ormal family back then was about 5 to 6 person which is the nature of extended familie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, second, so, then, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 8.0752688172 322% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2570.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1503006012 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7054791055 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48496993988 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 806.4 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6657696656 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.739130435 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6956521739 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73913043478 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289978625346 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104695782703 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699546983796 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216184403933 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309371820904 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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