Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, it was easier to identify what type of career job would lead to a secure, successful future. (TPO39-Task2)
Knowing whether a career will result in success or not is crucial because no one wants to spend their youthful years as fruitless years. there had been debates about whether it is easier to identify leading to success pathways in modern days or in the past. there exist more possibilities of distinct profession that a person can engage in which some people believe will be bewildering for a young adult entering the society. I'll try to justify this argument in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the job nowadays are constantly changing at an alarming and increasing rate. this makes the occupation unpredictable, as there are constantly birth of unseen jobs and wither of previously prominent jobs. this all begin with the "information revolution" and the manufacturing of robots and ai that will soon be replacing humans. For example an accountant might be a stable and with a guaranteed salary, however, now as ai learn this skill, the accountancy expertise will no longer be important. this is merely one example of the vast sinking jobs. While some jobs are no longer exist, there are constantly new opportunities being created by the development of ai, such as data scientist, a job never heard of in my youth. How is it possible to identify an non-existing career as a leading to success job? it may only be possible for those innovators of job to spot the chance. All those stated in the paragraph shows the unforeseeable nature of modern society.
Apart from the dynamically advancing technology that is making jobs vanish without a sign, the rapidly changing international relation and political situation is also contributing to the uncertainty of opportunities. one recent example is the China-USA trade conflict. previously, being farmers in USA might occur to be a stable occupation, but as china is biggest importer of USA agricultural goods, the trade conflict resulted in the implementation of tax on USA agricultural goods, and the demand for the goods plummeted. this cause the farmers who thought of their job as stable and secure job to lose their jobs. On the other hand, the automobile industry in china also seemed full of potential before the conflict. Nonetheless, as USA execute their policy on China and stop the export of electronics chips, the automobile industry in china also suffered heavy loss.
To sum up, I believe that to identify a career that will guarantee a success is almost impossible in this rapidly changing world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, while, apart from, for example, such as, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2071.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0512195122 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00262130175 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531707317073 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8257512961 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.55 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136737506703 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460941417202 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569192372029 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0892365215767 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335752876749 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.