Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Youngsters are at ages that should make impactful decisions for their life. It is also important for parents to know which decision their child is making. Personally, I believe that nowadays children are more dependent on their parents' ideas than in the past. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, in the past, parents had relatively more children than today's parents do. This causes them to be busier, so they could not spend much time as today's parents spend for their children. Therefore, every child did many of his personal jobs by herself, and in the future, they could make their own decisions without any dependency on their parents. An example of my father's experience is compelling evidence of this point. My father lived in a six-children family. His father was at the work most of the time, and his mother was in the home controlling six children. It is obvious that in such a family, parents can't observe their children carefully, as today's parents do. Hence, all of these children had to do their work by themselves and didn't depend on their parents at all. All these children are young individuals now and make many important decisions by themselves. For example, my father decided to migrate to another city to work and live without any concern about his parents’ pressure and his parents agreed with this decision without any interference in my father's life.
Second, nowadays, parents live in a competitive atmosphere. All the parents want to have the most successful child among others and it is an honor for them. Consequently, when they see other parents' works, they feel that they must do something against them, sometimes without any consideration of their children's interests. So it causes children to become dependent on their family in their decisions. For instance, my friend's parents grew up in a family that many of them were doctors. As a result, her parents thought that their child should become a doctor in the future and forced my friend to choose a major in university that she wasn't interested in. She also accepted this decision because she couldn't make a decision for herself since she was a child. Now she is suffering from this dependency and cannot continue his studies.
In sum, I am of the opinion that nowadays young people are more dependent on their family than before. This is because parents are less busy and have fewer children now and because they are in a competitive atmosphere and don’t let their children make a decision by themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, hence, if, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2157.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94724770642 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61750611674 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465596330275 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1237124081 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.875 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08333333333 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332223634671 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104414399569 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604659051684 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226649947628 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312051739599 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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