Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Governments earn most of their money from hours of hard work of their people. It is vital for them to spend this money on more important things. Although arts are very valuable, I believe that governments should spend more money on athletics. I feel this way for two reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the growth of athletics will bring a better face for a company and will improve their position in all over the world. Events like Olympic are very crucial for many countries to show their power in different sports to peoples. For instance, China is a big country with approximately two billion population. They invest a huge amount of their money on their athletes to be the best in all sports. In each Olympic, they receive a lot of medals and trophies and It leads to hear or see their names frequently in the news. They also become the host of the Olympics and spend a tremendous amount of money to hold the best Olympics in history. Hence, from four years before the Olympic, we hear China's Olympic everywhere. These things enhance their reputation throughout the world.
Second, investing more money in athletics attracts many youngsters to join a sport and plan to be more successful in it. So in this way, a country can increase the level of health, positive spirit and self-confidence in its people. Having happy and healthy people help a nation to flourish faster. My own experience is compelling evidence of this point. When I was twenty and in the first years of youth, I had no definite plan in my life. I also had many friends like myself. Once, we understood that the government had increased the rewards of winners in all sports. It encouraged my friends and me to join a sport or continue the previous sport that we used to do. So all of us planned to become a professional athlete and as a result, our life became regular and faced a striking change.
In sum, It is preferable for governments to spend more money on athletics. This is because it enhances the position of the country throughout the world and because it motivates youngsters to join a sport and increases their level of happiness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e. I also had many friends like myself. Once, we understood that the government had ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, second, so, for instance, i feel, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70603674541 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61986962243 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50656167979 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1353013456 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.9565217391 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5652173913 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.60869565217 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135484667778 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423673995987 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049940250925 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0935262622611 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046032797593 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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