Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Our job is one of the most important parts of our life, and it is crucial to manage it in a way that we can not only have better productivity in the job but also improve our quality of life in all aspects. Personally, I believe that it is preferable to work only three days a week with more hours, rather than five days with fewer hours. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, although spending three days a week on our job uses more energy because of longer time of working, it causes us to have more time for other tasks,. When we have four days in each week without needing to go to the job, we can have a better plan in our life to do other important jobs, for example reading our favorite books, watching TV, and also if it was needed, we can have an inferior job for fun or gaining more money. For instance, my mother's job is three days a week. She spends the other four days exercising, cooking delicious foods and any other thing to get more energy for the next three days to work. As a result, my mother has high efficiency in her job, as well as having fun with our family and doing other tasks.
Second, working three days a week is more satisfiable for most of the people who are parents. They feel a sense of responsibility to their children, and don't want to damage their life with their own job. If they want to go to job five days a week, they will come back to the home tiredly most of the time and want to rest. Therefore, they have only two days for managing house-work, training children, visiting their parents, and such things. My parents' example is compelling evidence of this. My parents work five days a week. After my brother's coming to our life, my parents could not occupy enough time for him, and they have to get help from their parents to grow up my brother. Although my grandparents are very kind and help us, my parents are always worried about my brother.
In sum, I am of the opinion that working three days a week with longer hours is better than five days work with a shorter time. It is because people can have more time to do other things and because parents can manage their children better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1810.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36144578313 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20508392644 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455421686747 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2135305031 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.555555556 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0555555556 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380421532434 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151892992265 0.076458572812 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988162654449 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263255652256 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435100651574 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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