Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny that there certainly both pros and cons of wholelly following others' advice. While some people believe that youngsters depended too much on thier parents 100 years ago than people in today do, some people may think that actually they were more independent than nowaday children are. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely agree with the former opinion, and in which follows I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
To begin with, nowaday, thanks to internet, young people have way more access to information, which can help them to make their minds. The last few decades, technology is growing at a fast pace, and our daily life is influenced as well. Not only our lifestyles are effected, but also our information gathering is dramatically affected. Sometimes it can be hard to ask certain things from your parents, and my personal experience can support this claim. When I was a teenager, I was so ashamed of asking my mother to how to cope with my very first period. Thus, I searched in Internet, and joined online platform to ask question about struggles, and got useful feedbacks and advices. In result, it really helped me to to deal with certain problems, and choose what kind of products to use. This certainly clear to see why I think in this way.
Secondly, communties, schools and university adminstrations, and privite instituitions are offeriong professional advice -parents do not have a ability to provide - for youngsters in various fields. Sometimes, only profesionals can guide us to certain things that requires specific certificates and deep knowladges. Drawing from my personal experience as a senior in a high school. Ever since I was I child, I was always wanted to study in Japan. Therefore, deciding which university to go and my major was such a hard for me. It was even harder for my parents who are do not have a further background knowledge about japan and studing aboard. At that time, my high school counsuler who specilized in this matter helped me a lot.
In short, all aforementioned reasons lead us to draw the conclusion that young people are partly influenced by their parents in deciso making. It is mainly due to the fact that they can attain any infromation in internet, and can get professional helps from various institutions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: others'; other's
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...to choose, I would definitely agree with the former opinion, and in which follows...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, i think, in short, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89974293059 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81386629462 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609254498715 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4396930269 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.45 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186511269481 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463324360921 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634952736816 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112179920481 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038093960242 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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