Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer.
The clothes that we use is a very important part of your everyday lives. It is what we use as a form of being more beautiful or presentable to other people. The claim that different clothes influence the way people behave, I’m sure some people would agree with it; other would disagree. In my view, in fact people behave differently when they wear different clothes for two important reasons.
The main reason is that clothes show which group you belong. Many people wear their clothes to indicate that they are from a specific social class or religion. In that case, the way which they behave will directly indicate the behavior of the whole group. Also, people could assume what the person’s behavior will be just looking to his clothes. For example, I remember that I saw last week, on television, a social experiment that a person tried to book a room in a five stars hotel. First, the actor was using very cheap clothes, I could see that there were a lot of holes and dirty on his t-shirt. When he arrived that the hotel’s reception, immediately a staff member tried to push, in a very rude way, the actor to go outside and to never return. The staff also mention that he will call the police. On the next day, the actor changed his clothes to a very fashion one. In that time, the man entered without being noted by the employees and received a very polite treatment. As you can see, the clothes that the man was wearing showed to other people what they could expect to his behavior based on their status, even without the actor saying or doing anything.
Another reason is that the clothing might indicate the job of the person. In almost every place, people use clothes to show their function in a specific place. This could be from the color of a vest or an entire costume. In that way, they need to behave regarding their position. For instance, I have a friend called John and he is a police officer for about ten years now. John is a very spontaneous person, he is also telling jokes an laughing. However, one day I encountered my friend working as a police officer in my city’s main street. I went to talk to him, but he was very serious and barely talked to me. On the next day, John went to my house to apologise and explained to me that he needs to behave in a complete different form when he is dressed with the enforcement suit. Also, he told me that it is a basic rule for police officers. This experience taught me that the clothe which a person is using might represent an obligation to what type of behavior he needs to take.
In sum, though some may disagree with this claim, I believe that the clothes we wear will influence directly our behavior. Not only showing our circle of people but also indicating our job or function. Everyone should work to understand that a t-shirt might represent more than just a color or an image printed on it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...fficers. This experience taught me that the clothe which a person is using might represent...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, for example, for instance, in fact, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2364.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 526.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49429657795 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38951528232 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475285171103 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 741.6 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3768027308 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5172413793 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1379310345 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55172413793 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.88709677419 348% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279425029877 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676131220588 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822941140752 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178823009722 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11019997188 0.0645574589148 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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