Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Things that we enjoy doing are a very important part of our lives. It is the time that we use to alleviate the everyday stress and increase our quality of live. Some people would believe that nowadays the society have a good balance between personal enjoyment-doing things and important things that we should do; others would disagree. In my view, today people spend too much time on personal things for two important reasons.
The main reason is the large number of people using their cellphones. It is not difficult to find people on work using their smartphones frenetically. Every time someone is checking their social media account, creating stories or texting his/her friend on time that they were expected to be doing other more important tasks. For example, last week, when I was in my hometown, I went to a department store called "Gigabyte" and I was trying to find a new laptop charger because my old one was broken. I searched for about ten minutes and I was not able to find it. In that way, I tried to talk with the store's owner. When I was talking to him, he did not even looked at me. He was always looking to his phone and I could see that he was liking photos on Instagram. After I finished asking about the charger he just pointed on a random direction where the charger could be. So, I went to the pointed place and, as expected, I could not find the product and I leave the store very upset. This event clearly demonstrated that today people prefer to spend time on personal things rather than doing things they should have been doing.
Another reason is about the human's nature to do things that are easier. We also have a word to describe this behavior and it is called "procrastination". People tend to procrastinate in every task they do, we could also find people that prefer to just sleep or watch television instead of doing personal enjoyment thing such as playing video games or going to the gym. Hence, we can imagine what people are able to mitigate things that they should do. For instance, I remember when I was in my professional internship people. Normally, I worked seven hours per day. When I arrived at home the only thing that wanted to do was to lay down on my bed and watch Youtube videos. But, I have a lot of domestic things to do, like to wash the dishes and remove the trash and I always chose to procrastinate. When the weekend arrived my apartment was a very dirty and also stating to smell not so good. So, when the situation was unsustainable, I finally cleaned the mess. This experience taught me that we spend a lot of time doing superfluous rather than important ones.
In sum, though some may believe that personal enjoyment-doing things do not interfere in our life. I belive that today we spend to much time on these things. Not only people are using their phones excessively nowadays but also it is from our natural behavior to prefer to do more enjoyable tasks. Every one should work to diminish the amount of time that they spend on useless taks and give more focus to what they should be doing.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
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...that he was liking photos on Instagram. After I finished asking about the charger he ...
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Suggestion: humans'; human's
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Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
... our life. I belive that today we spend to much time on these things. Not only peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, if, look, may, so, as to, for example, for instance, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2532.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 552.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58695652174 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69717114754 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469202898551 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 788.4 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0559944201 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.410256095778 0.236089414692 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114212085249 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120210702562 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.299210466001 0.150856017488 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0748596089905 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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