Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People can solve important problems by themselves or with the help from their family members so there’s no need for the government to help them.
Coping with problems is a formidable task for humans and they have varied approaches to solve their difficulties. The opinions are divided as to whether people should solve their problems individually or the government should provide them with feasible solutions. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that government must have a big role in removing the peoples' difficulties. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, people do not have enough ability to eliminate some basic deficiencies in the society. Especially in these cases interference of the authorities and officials is essential. I explain an example to illuminate this subject. It goes without saying that unemployment is a great problem for people in the current economic climate. Most of the unemployed members of the society are graduated students or youngsters. These people are well-educated and they took the right way of living. They have decided to learn and gain knowledge in order to land suitable jobs. Lack of job is not their fault and they can not solve this tremendous problem individually or even by help of their family members. Government should set the wheel of economy and industries in motion in order to create job for youngsters.
The second reason coming to mind is rooted in the fact that some social problems such as robbery, insecurity and high rate of crimes are related to whole society. Probably some people are able to handle these problems for themselves or their family members but it is not instrumental for all people. In these cases, government should solve the social problems basically. For example the feasible remedy is eliminating misery for the mentioned problems. As a result, the approach of solving deficiencies by people is not a basic solution.
In brief, I believe that without government's aid, people's problems stay unsolved. Since not only solving some problems is greater than people's ability but also some problems require painstaking attention of government in order to complete elimination.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 140, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... difficulties. The opinions are divided as to whether people should solve their problems indi...
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Line 3, column 128, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cases'' or 'case's'?
Suggestion: cases'; case's
...ies in the society. Especially in these cases interference of the authorities and off...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, well, as to, for example, in brief, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16959064327 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85098365373 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7960689394 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291727747129 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801777626141 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701090303898 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175393933092 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270680499395 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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