TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
obeying the rules is always a momentous matter in the societies and the governments expect that people and especially juveniles should commit to the rules invariably. Regularity is a good feature and there is a well-known statement which expresses that bad rules are better than anarchy. some people believe that the recent rules are very strict to follow especially for new generations. Personally, I confirm the notion of these people and I think that society should amend some of the rules. I will substantiate my opinion in the following paragraphs.
The first thing coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that current rules of the society ,especially in my country, have been passed many years ago thus they don't have any harmony with the present situation of the young people. In order to shed light on this matter I explain some information about my country. In my country, majority of the rules have been legislated at the beginning of the 40 years ago revolution. As you can see these kinds of rules were instrumental in the past not nowadays.
The second reason behind my standpoint is rooted in the fact that great number of the strict rules is related to the religion and following them in the current status is impossible. For instance, any relationship between boys and girls in prohibited and police could arrest them and they will be in police custody. Finally, their parents have to come and explain about the relationship. However, these kind of religious rules are not acceptable among new generations because boys and girls have different rapports by means of the technological advances such as internet and smartphones.
In brief, I believe that the laws are very hard to obey especially for young people because not only these rules have been passed many years ago without considering the current situation of the society but also most of these rules are religious and following them by juveniles looks impossible. thus, It is better for governments to modify their rules each year by regarding the condition of various members of the community.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Obeying
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...that bad rules are better than anarchy. some people believe that the recent rules ar...
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...e and I think that society should amend some of the rules. I will substantiate my opinion i...
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Suggestion: mind elucidating
...aragraphs. The first thing coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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... issue that current rules of the society ,especially in my country, have been pass...
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Suggestion: don't
...ve been passed many years ago thus they dont have any harmony with the present situa...
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...ginning of the 40 years ago revolution. As you can see these kinds of rules were i...
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...xplain about the relationship. However, these kind of religious rules are not acceptable a...
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Suggestion: Thus
...ing them by juveniles looks impossible. thus, It is better for governments to modify...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, regarding, second, so, thus, well, for instance, i think, in brief, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00854700855 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73146133038 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501424501425 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.6965266462 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.2 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195809613358 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681036283553 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562964203991 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12513332491 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597909687717 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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