Some people think that parents should plan their children’s leisure time carefully. Other people believe those children should decide for themselves how to spend their free time. Which idea do you agree with? Give reasons for your choice.
Planing is great matter for humain beings specially parents who have children. As we know children have a lot of leisure time and parents hesitate about how mange their kids' time. The opinions are divided as to whether planing for their time is essential or parents should let them decide about their free time. Whwn it comes to me it is my firm conviction that benefits of planing for our children are more than that of leaving them decide independently. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, parents are more aware of their children's future and they know their required abilities for having a better future or landing better jobs. Parents should plan for their kids according to their prospective necessities. I explain an example to illuminate this subject. English language ability was not an essential matter for majority of parents several years ago and they did not have any plan for improving their children's linguistic tasks. Furthermore, Childrens did not possess any foresight about its importance in the future. Conversly, some parents planned for their children to attend an English class in their free time. As a result , these kids can land better jobs in the present time since English ability is not an advanntage, it's a requirement.
The second reason comming to mind is rooted in the fact that children don't have enough foresight for planing their time. Kids always are inclines to have fun, play with their friends or siblings, play video games and whatever. Unlike children, parents have the golden opportuni to reconize their kids' talents and lead them to the right way in order to improve and nurture their potential abilities. For instance, parents are able to indentify a musical talent in their kid and help him/ her to attend a music class to cultivate this potential ability. As a result free time is the best chance to attend this classes.
In brief, I belive fathers and mothers must have some beneficial plans for their kids' leisure time. Since not only parents possess enough foresight about the future's requirement but also they can cultivate the potential talents of their children in the correct approach.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 206, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...eir kids time. The opinions are divided as to whether planing for their time is essential or ...
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Line 3, column 660, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...sh class in their free time. As a result , these kids can land better jobs in the ...
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Line 3, column 759, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...e English ability is not an advanntage, its a requirement. The second reason comm...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ind is rooted in the fact that children dont have enough foresight for planing their...
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Line 5, column 553, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ss to cultivate this potential ability. As a result free time is the best chance t...
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Line 7, column 20, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'father'
Suggestion: father
...tend this classes. In brief, I belive fathers and mothers must have some beneficial p...
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Line 7, column 159, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'futures'' or 'future's'?
Suggestion: futures'; future's
...ents possess enough foresight about the futures requirement but also they can cultivate...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, as to, for instance, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97593582888 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4763356441 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6427690108 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9473684211 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6842105263 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68421052632 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376891946066 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14093004097 0.076458572812 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0982839927816 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258676735604 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498239089061 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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