Some people think that parents should plan their children’s leisure time carefully. Other people believe those children should decide for themselves how to spend their free time. Which idea do you agree with? Give reasons for your choice.
Planning is great matter for human beings specially parents who have children. As we know children have a lot of leisure time and parents hesitate about how manage their kids' time. The opinions are divided as to whether planning for their time is essential or parents should let them decide about their free time. When it comes to me it is my firm conviction that benefits of planning for our children are more than that of leaving them decide independently. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, parents are more aware of their children's future and they know their required abilities for having a better future or landing better jobs. Parents should plan for their kids according to their prospective necessities. I explain an example to illuminate this subject. English language ability was not an essential matter for majority of parents several years ago and they did not have any plan for improving their children's linguistic tasks. Furthermore, children did not possess any foresight about its importance in the future. Conversely, some parents planned for their children to attend an English class in their free time. As a result, these kids can land better jobs in the present time since English ability is not an advantage, it's a requirement.
The second reason coming to mind is rooted in the fact that children don't have enough foresight for planning their time. Kids always are inclined to have fun, play with their friends or siblings, play video games and whatever. Unlike children, parents have the golden opportunity to recognize their kids' talents and lead them to the right way in order to improve and nurture their potential abilities. For instance, parents are able to identify a musical talent in their kid and help him/ her to attend a music class to cultivate this potential ability. As a result free time is the best chance to attend these classes.
In brief, I believe fathers and mothers must have some beneficial plans for their kids' leisure time. Since not only parents possess enough foresight about the future's requirement but also they can cultivate the potential talents of their children with the correct approach.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: whether
...eir kids time. The opinions are divided as to whether planning for their time is essential or...
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...ce English ability is not an advantage, its a requirement. The second reason comi...
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...ind is rooted in the fact that children dont have enough foresight for planning thei...
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...ts are able to identify a musical talent in their kid and help him/ her to attend...
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...ss to cultivate this potential ability. As a result free time is the best chance t...
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...ents possess enough foresight about the futures requirement but also they can cultivate...
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...eir children with the correct approach.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, furthermore, if, second, so, as to, for instance, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00534759358 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48618246774 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9625849607 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5263157895 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6842105263 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396110944114 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149161773266 0.076458572812 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102535505277 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279181703102 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530782117606 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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