TPO 47- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Being aware of different happening throughout the world had been always a controversial subject among people. some people believe that by knowing various kinds of news from other regions or countries, we don't obtain any important information but the other group believes that this world is integrated and different matters will be related to each other mutually. Personally, I agree with the belief of the latter group. I will substantiate my notion in the following paragraphs.
The first thing coming to mind to elucidate this issue is concerned with the fact that every alteration in our universe has a consequence. this pleasant or unpleasant action could affect that region or in some cases includes other areas unpredictably. At the first sight, It is likely that we think this change will not have any severe outcome in my daily life but we should forethoughtful. In order to shed lights on this matter, I will bring an example. A country in one part of the world contaminates its natural resources such as oceans or atmosphere. Absolutely the outcomes of these activities are more drastic in that country but global warming is an important side effect of these pollutions which encompass other countries as well. As you can see, we must be aware of the pursuits of other countries to prevent unpleasant happenings for our next generations.
The second reason behind my standpoint is rooted in this matter that because of technological advances in military equipment, people and especially governments should be aware of other countries behavior with each other. For example, atomic bombs are very devastative and their impact is very widespread in various grounds such as genetic, environment, civilian and infrastructures of nations. I should emphasize that all of these side effects are communicable.
In brief, people and countries should be more cautious about the events in other regions because not only the effects of some activities are not predictable in short-time but also some pursuits such as wars are likely to include a vast region of the world due to devastative military equipment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, well, for example, in brief, in short, such as, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16909620991 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92063678896 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559766763848 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.2979057693 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.2 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8666666667 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11246068414 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357788035133 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0308367750419 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0667721743537 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420663447676 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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