Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People should spend money on things that are long-lasting, like expensive jewelry, rather than spending money on short-lived pleasures, like traveling.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is believed that people should spend money for the long lasting materials. I agree with this idea because the long lasting materials can help people in any problematic situation and it increases the dignity of the people in the society.
To begin with, one of the reasons of my specific thought is that long lasting materials help people to solve any problematic situation in their life. Because by selling these types of things people can earn money and can use this money to solve the daily life problems. I have to admit my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my personal experience. I remember when I read in college five years ago. I had not any type of job at that time, as I was a student. My father fell into a very serious disease name cancer. It was in the inital stage, so, the doctor said that the treatment of my father could make him free from diseases. But there required a huge amount of money. My father was the only incomer of our family. So it would be very difficult for us to manage the money. After that, my mother sold her ornaments to manage money for the treatment of my father. at last, my father was cured of cancer. If my mother had not used long-lasting material such as gold, it would have very difficult for us to treat my father. From the example, we can say that in any problematic situation we can use long-lasting materials.
Secondly, why I illustrate my specific thought is that long-lasting substances increase the dignity and pride of the people in society.
Because these materials normally are very expensive. When a person uses these types of things, it automatically increased the prestige of person in the surrounding society. My personal example is acompelling illustration of this. It reminds me of the time when last year I joined into a multinational company. I went to the office in first by wearing a very expensive wristwatch and sunglasses. After reaching the office I found that the owner of the company influenced by my dressed up. He promoted me into the higher designation and made rules that every employee should use that type of dress code. If I had not used such types of dress code, I would have never found such a type of prestige and dignity in the office. Therefore from the example, we can say that the long-lasting things increase the prestige and dignity of the society.
To sum up, for the above reasons, I strongly believe that people should spend money on the long-lasting things. This is because the long-lasting substances can help people to solve any problematic situation and it increases the dignity and prestige of the people in the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2186.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69098712446 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66531898442 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422746781116 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1103043691 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.0714285714 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6428571429 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.92857142857 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186587369337 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594364699034 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679052068819 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142960882746 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646492934045 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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