Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The discussion about whether or not the effect of internet is a very controversial discussion. There are people on both side of the policy who have very strong feelings. Some people feel that internet gives us a lot of valuable information. But most believe that internet creates a huge problem by giving so much information. However if I were forced to chose, I would raise my voice for that internet really creates problem by providing much unnecessary information. It is my firm believe that these unnecessary information make great problems due to several reasons. I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, one of the reasons for my specific thought is that internet reducing people interaction. Now people even bosom friends also does not give enough time to their friends. Because of internet the human have been self centered. Though there have been both positive and negative effects since the invention of the internet, but in regards to face-to-face interaction, it has done a lot of harm. I have to admit my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, my friends and I used to go out to bars a lot. Sometimes, there would be a lull in the conversation, but for the most part, we talked and had a good time. Some people were quieter than others were but it was no big deal, we were all together. Now there is a constant need to be entertained. Whenever we are out and run out of things to talk about, everyone retreats to their phone and using internet. Now, some of my friends just look at their phone and use internet the whole time while we are out. In the end, I think the internet has done more harm than good because it has altered people’s perception of what is worthy of attention and hurt the quality of communication between loved ones.
Secondly, why I illustrate my specific concept is that internet creates addiction to general people. Especially the students mostly have been harmed by internet. So their study are almost destroyed due to internet. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. I remember when I was in university I have to use internet for my study purpose. When I took first internet I was completely addicted by it. Even, I felt unhappy to attend the class. As a result I failed in the first semester. After that I could understand the effect of internet and I gave up it and use only in some important works. It is certainly clear If I had not given the internet, I would have failed more semester in the university.
In light of the above mentioned reasons, I strongly believe internet creates harms to us. This is because it decrease the strong relationship among friends and loved one and creates addiction of general people to the internet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion: However,
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... not give enough time to their friends. Because of internet the human have been self ce...
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Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
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Message: Did you mean 'our'?
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...en, I felt unhappy to attend the class. As a result I failed in the first semester...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, while, i think, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71926229508 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7546891138 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497950819672 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 748.8 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2219659965 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.2903225806 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7419354839 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.51612903226 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240240456216 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599520416833 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537299641779 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145242082747 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477235689131 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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