What are the important qualities of a good son or daughter? Have these qualities
changed or remained the same over time in your culture? Use specific
reasons and examples to support your answer.
The discussion about whether or not the characteristics of ideal descendents is a very controversial discussion. There are people on both side of the policy who have very strong feelings. Some people feel that the important qualities are hard work, risk-taking ability, work freely for family, proper use of technology etc. and this qualities have changed over times. However, most believe that these qualities have not changed with respect to time. However If I were forced to chose, I would raise my voice for that in our culture these qualities remain same. It is my firm belief that the qualities of ideal descendents not changed due to several reasons. I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, one of the reasons of my specific thought is that hard working for the support of the family is one of the great qualities of the descendents. Because by hard working a son or daughter can help their family and their parents. Hard working is such a quality that by doing it one person must do better for one’s own aim in life, family life, social life and ultimately the country. I have to admit my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my personal experiences. You see I have always wanted to write a book. I remember when I completed my graduation, I thought I would write an indispensable piece of literature that would live forever. However, after years of writing, I finally figured out that I wasn’t very good at it. But I continued to read, write, and study. A few years ago, I started teaching TOEFL and discovered that I had learned some valuable information that I could present in a new and unique way. After years of writing and failing, I finally completed a book that I could be proud of. But more importantly, I learned more about my strengths, weaknesses, and the direction I wanted my life to take. If I had not performed that type of hard work, I would have never learnt about the aim of my life and how to achieve that aim. So we can say that hard working is an important quality of a descendent and this quality is not changed over time.
Secondly, why I illustrate my personal thought is that risk taking for the family is one of the qualities of the ideal descendents. By taking risk a person can do better for his family. It is one of the important qualities of our culture, which also not changed with the time. My personal experience is a compelling illustration 0f this. When I think of risk, I immediately think of the stand-up comedy class I tried a few years ago. I have always admired comedians, but I was never brave enough to take the stage and try myself. For my birthday, my wife paid for me to take a stand-up comedy class. I was so nervous.The first time I took the stage I could hardly say a word. I wanted to quit, but my wife told me I would regret it. I went back and tried again. I still was not funny, but I lasted a couple minutes longer. By the end of the three-month class, I gave a ten-minute stand-up routine to a packed comedy club in midtown Manhattan. Putting myself on a stage in front of an audience was terrifying, but it made me a stronger person. If I had never taken the risk, I would have still regretted it today. So, it is clear to see why risk taking is most important qualities of a good son or daughter.
To sum up, in light of above mention reasons, I strongly believe that the hard working and risk taking ability are very essential qualities of good son or daughter and these qualities are not changed in our culture. Because by these qualities good son or daughter can help their family.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, i think, to begin with, to sum up, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 100.0 43.0788530466 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2883.0 1977.66487455 146% => OK
No of words: 657.0 407.700716846 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.38812785388 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06280665599 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53964212334 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.385083713851 0.524837075471 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 945.0 618.680645161 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 657.0 20.1344086022 3263% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2883.0 100.406767564 2871% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 657.0 20.6045352989 3189% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 119.0 5.45110844103 2183% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268159666981 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.268159666981 0.076458572812 351% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214969211087 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0960724157269 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 327.7 11.7677419355 2785% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -578.46 58.1214874552 -995% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 257.2 10.1575268817 2532% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 9.66 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 38.36 8.01818996416 478% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 10.002688172 550% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 264.8 10.0537634409 2634% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 55.0 10.247311828 537% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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