Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is critically important the young community's attitude in case of helping society. In my view, young people do not help their community. It is my firm believe that they now want personal freedom in their task and they want to take risks in their work. These show, these types of attitudes due to a number of reasons. I will develop my ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, one of the reasons for my specific thought is that they now want personal freedom. They do not want to help their community by the conventional attitude. Because in this modern-day young people want to work by their own volition. In this way, they try to help others. I have to admit my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my personal experience. I remember when I was in junior high school, I want to join the football team. I was small and had never played much football before, but I wanted to try. My father did not think, I would like football very much, but he said if I want to try I could. After three months of football practice and riding the bench I ended up hating football. Even though I hated everything about football, I was and still am grateful for my experience. If my father had not let me took decision, I would have blamed him for the way things turn out. So, from that experience, I realise that personal freedom is very essential for doing any job in case of any person. So, young people firstly want personal freedom and they like to help the community by their own volition.
secondly, why I illustrate my specific concept is that young people want to take new and risky step rather than help the community by a conventional way. Now, young like to do any job which full of adventures and risks. They want to help the community by using those experiences. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. It reminds me of the time when last year I admitted to the comedy class. I usually liked comedians but had never brave enough to take the stage and performed myself. My wife paid for me to a stand-up comedy class. I was nervous. For the first time in my life, I took the stage but hardly said any word. I want to quit but my wife said that I had to regret it. After three months of stand-up comedy class and taking the 30 minutes packed-up comedy club, I learn this quality. If I had not take risks, I would never learn how to be a great comedian. So, young people want to do better for the community by taking risks.
In conclusion, after considering all of the reasons stated above, I strongly believe that young people do not want to help their society. This is because they want personal freedom in their tasks and they like to take risks to perform the job for the community.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...community by the conventional attitude. Because in this modern-day young people want to...
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Suggestion: Secondly
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Suggestion: taken
...lub, I learn this quality. If I had not take risks, I would never learn how to be a ...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risks performing'.
Suggestion: risks performing
...om in their tasks and they like to take risks to perform the job for the community.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, in conclusion, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2238.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44047619048 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45697097036 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43253968254 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 691.2 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 28.0 9.59856630824 292% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6866801815 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.8181818182 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2727272727 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.84848484848 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180503300179 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598267324525 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768892891969 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139593549465 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0147603364578 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 11.7677419355 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.88 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.79 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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