Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People should take time to relax with hobbies or physical activities that are very different from what they do at work.
For the last decades, people have been working most of their time in a day. Thereby, most people wonder whether doing similar activities and hobbies in their little free time after work can bring enough enjoyment for them or not. In my opinion, you should do totally different activities from things that you do at work in your leisure time. It’s because doing hobbies similar with your job is boring and moreover, you will get acquainted with new and different people if you do different activities from your job in your free time. I will illustrate my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First, doing hobbies and activities that are different from your tasks at work will provide you with the opportunity to experience a different atmosphere and consequently, it will not be boring for you. For example, my dad is a mathematics teacher. I remember, once, we were playing a mathematical indoor game when he arrived home. We invited him to join us. He accepted. However, after a couple of turns, he felt bored because the game was like things that he had been teaching whole of the day. As I found out, I recommended another game that was based on creating words with correct spelling. During the other game, my dad was more active, energetic, and enthusiastic to continue playing. I am sure that If we had continued the first game, my dad would have remained bored. Hence, I suggest doing hobbies different from your job’s tasks to avoid becoming bored.
Second, doing different hobbies require going to different places and spending time with different people. Therefore, it will give you a good chance to get acquainted with new and different people. For example, consider a professional football player. If he wants to spend his leisure time with similar activities related to his career, he should play football with people who are the same as his teammates. As a result, his social interaction will remain the same as before. On the contrary, should he spend his free time to do a different activity such as playing golf, he will meet different people and consequently, he can extend his social interactions with those different people. Thus, I believe that relaxing with hobbies and activities that they are different from your job can lead you to more diverse friendships.
Based on the aforementioned reasons, it can be concluded that why I believe that doing things in your pastime that they are different from your career is better than doing similar ones.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92619047619 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66574282467 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459523809524 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5530733065 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0454545455 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0909090909 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.59090909091 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406989524729 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117245410832 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121703467025 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261258018933 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111640068804 0.0645574589148 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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