Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People should take time to relax with hobbies or physical activities that are very different from what they do at work | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People should take time to relax with hobbies or physical activities that are very different from what they do at work.

Almost everyone in this stressful society has some hobbies to entertain themselves. I believe relaxing with activities different from what people do at work is a rational choice.

First, relaxing with activities different from work brings social benefits. Most people would stay in a company for years, and their colleagues or clients are relatively fixed, meaning the range of social backgrounds of people they socialize with will be limited. And during their free time, doing things similar to what they do at work will likely bring them new acquaintances from similar walks of life compared to people they know at work, making their social contacts less diversified. However, if they can develop hobbies different from work, they can meet people from other sectors. For example, if freelancing artists decide to spend time camping during the weekends, they will be able to befriend programmers working at internet companies or athletes from professional teams. And these new friends will be able to share perspectives that they might have never thought about expanding their horizons. Also, if they are ever in need, it will be more likely that their new friends will be of assistance in ways that their co-workers or clients cannot, such as solving computer malfunctions or offering workout advice.

Second, doing activities differently from work in people’s spare time makes people healthier. Most occupations require employees to perform particular tasks repetitively, and a long time doing so develops chronic conditions that may make people suffer. For example, office clerks might spend hours sitting in front of computers in fixed positions, causing shoulder or lower back pains. And if they choose to kill time in front of computers, their symptoms might deteriorate. On the other hand, if they opt for pastimes like swimming, their body would get stretched and relaxed, alleviating the pressure placed on their spines, and ultimately improving their physical health. Moreover, most people work under stress, especially during times of economic crisis. Regardless of how diligent they are, many would fear losing their jobs. As a result, it is not rare to see employees who suffer from mental problems. But if they can participate in entertainment activities different from their jobs, they can divert their attention to more enjoyable endeavors making them less worried about their occupations.

To conclude, relaxing with activities different from work allows people to diversify their social connections and improves their health.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, for example, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2160.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42713567839 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68854552941 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562814070352 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1605767009 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.684210526 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9473684211 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78947368421 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336712614133 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130333110232 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124038096025 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262250514818 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662919706137 0.0645574589148 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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