Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my opinion, governments should allocate more budget to support artworks rather than other things. It is because the art of a country can represent the features of that country much better than any other thing. Additionally, artworks can provide people with calm and pleasure. I will illustrate my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First, the most practical way to demonstrate the features of a society is its artworks. Artworks stem from specific things such as the culture, the history and the religion of a society. Thereby, artworks can represent those qualities in an attracting way to other communities. For example, in an Islamic country, such as Iran, their history, culture, and religion are summarised in their mosques design with specific painting on walls and specific calligraphies. It is a very attractive way to demonstrate the specific qualities of their country to other countries. The evidence for other communities’ attraction to these kinds of artwork is proven through their numerous visits from those mosques. Thus, artworks in every country can be a good way to communicate with other countries to show the properties of a country; thereby, governments should spend more money to develop it.
Second, ordinary people can feel relaxed and calm down by helping with artworks. Indeed, they can relieve their stress by listening to a piece of music or going to a painting exhibition and make free their minds by watching those beautiful paintings. I remember once, I had a rough day at work. As a result, when I arrived home, I was so nervous; thus, I cannot focus on anything to do. I found my iPad and listened to a piece of classical music for a couple of minutes. Gradually, that piece of music gave me a good feeling and helped me to relieve all of the tension of my mind. I felt so relaxed after listening more and actually, I forgot the difficulty of that day. Hence, I think that artworks can help people to relax and calm down after a rough day; therefore, more money should spend on developing it by governments.
Based on the aforementioned reasons, it can be concluded that artworks are so important for a community and its people too; thus, the government should allocate more money to support it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, i think, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93667546174 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86392375957 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493403693931 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2538755619 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.55 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.95 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156998270864 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471216847302 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543338302897 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112827971376 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485184698292 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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