Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's hectic life, There are some works that people should not do and some works that people would like to do. Some people claim that these days people spend more time doing their mandatory work. From my vantage point, other people assert that as time goes on people have more time to do their interests. I believe that these days people want to spend too much time doing some work that they should do because not only do they want to adapt themselves to their surroundings, but also their expressions have increased.
The first point that should be mentioned here is that nowadays people try to conform themselves to others such as their colleagues or their friends. On one hand, the competition between people has increased. Then, they prefer to do some works that they should do, and they do not assign some time for some work that they like. For instance, when students find that they are weak in doing their assignments, they prefer to study hard instead of going to the gym; however, they are interested in exercise. On the other hand, people like to use others' experiences. They think that they do not have enough time to get some experiences from their interest works. For example, some students prefer to follow the method of successful students in studying instead of their favorite way of studying.
But there is a furthermore subtle point we must consider. People incline to have a better life. Therefore, they should work hard and they do not have sufficient time to do some activities that they love. For example, some people work in two or three companies to get more money and have a convenient life. They prefer convenience to composure and think that they should work hard to obtain this goal. For instance, some people like to convene and gather with their family, but they think this action wastes their time. Likewise, these days people prefer to eat fast food. Although they like to cook, they think that cooking deteriorates their time.
All in all, both conformity to other people's lives and tend convenience force people to have a lower time doing their favorite activities. It is predicted that by the passage of time people would assign less time to their interests.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, likewise, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8031496063 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32822749871 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433070866142 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6511807957 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1428571429 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09523809524 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359771316924 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136734427036 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116420312868 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261139351206 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0843915155416 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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