Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is not uncommon today that many people tend to spend much time in the things they like instead of what they should do. Yet, Some people think it could not give us any benefits or play an important role in our future life because these personal enjoyment things probably take up too much time to complete our missions what we have to on time. From my perspective, I believe an interesting thing which you like doing might give us some unbelievable profits and increase the knowledge you have never learned. I will illustrate my viewpoint from the following points.

There are a lot of students who like playing games always spending much more time in PS4 or XBOX rather than the homework thus some parents start to suspect the correctness they bought the game console for children. Personally, that may not a bad thing. Taking myself as an example, I also like TV games and when I was 12 years-old as a Junior high school student, playing games in English version like Civilization 4 became a necessary thing I have to do every day. Even if I have homework need to complete, my vocabulary and the sense of English have improved a lot. As meanwhile, I learned numerous amount of interesting history stories from games, which improved my history score.

Besides, sometimes doing other irrelevant things can inspire your work. When I was sophomore year, the great pressure from writing essays made my depression a little. It would make me getting ill if I continue these things. I have an older cousin, a person whom I Iooked up and admired, remained me that there is nothing wrong with escaping something and doing the things that you have never done. He introduced me music. After a while I learned how to play guitar, I found it gave me a profound effort that I have many ideas about my essays. I don’t support some statements people should pay more time into the things they have to do because the experience of learning music taught me if one meets a problem on their mission it is a good choice that we can pay our attention on the things we like.

In a nutshell, spending much more time on your favorite thing is not a bad choice. Not only release ourselves, but the important thing is that there have some possibilities that the things you like can become the things you need do every day.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, so, thus, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1896.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60194174757 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48335015556 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541262135922 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.2220385672 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.333333333 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8888888889 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.44444444444 5.45110844103 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365071382713 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1137542381 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114810449297 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247787976513 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693260621518 0.0645574589148 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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